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Just Because I hate rhyming doesn't mean I'm lazy.

Tue Mar 27, 2007, 6:37 PM
  • Listening to: Dakishimetai.
I am ‘Minority’
in every sense of every syllable,
I am the ignored society
at it’s very, very best.
Just because there’s one of me
doesn’t make me mute.
I’m a self-made piece of eurotrash –
left un-capitalized by false niceties
and an overabundances of
hyphens-dashes-dottedlines -
personal definitions/aspirations.
Longitude and latitude don’t come into play
in my definition.
I am an Atheist,
not an Existentialist, but close and admiring,
so I must sacrifice puppies
and blindly suffer through my life
just to go
straight to hell
[left un-capitalized by false niceties, etc.];
I have nothing to believe in
so I must be sarcastic,
sadistic, insensitive, silent.
Just because I’ve forgotten how to smile
doesn’t mean I have no one
who wants me to remember.
I am Depressed,
I am Female,
I am [obviously] Menstrual.
I don’t even have to go into this one,
or do I?
I am a Packrat
because I fall in love with objects,
old objects, vibrant in color;
fire-engine red water carriers,
teal blue gas lamps,
white stereo headphones and
mint green typewriters –
anything truly beautiful and
so not in my reality.
Just because I’m in the wrong decade
doesn’t mean I’m not ahead.
I am a Poet,
a crafter of words and complex
sentence equations.
An Editor, an aspiring Publisher –
a Wordsmith, a Music-smith –
I am Jailbait and a Figment
of your imagination.
Just because I’m your spawn
does not mean I’ll ever let myself
be anything like You.

Devious Comments

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:iconkampasi:
Phil is wrong. I think that much is obvious.
But just becayse you rhyme doesn't mean you're a bad poet, either.
I love this.

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:iconunimatsuriku:
Hey miss I-V, dance to the mellody,
Rip out the rhymes and feel it right through me,
Ending and begining with the simmilar sound,
Got this rekkid' spinnin' arround and arround,
Electo bassline splittin' through my spine,
While the hardcore synth's just whine and whine,
Gotta sing it, sing it right, sing it right out loud,
Gotta sing it to the people every person in the croud,
Just ignore all the lyrics and forget all the noise,
Focus your mind away from the girls and the boys,
Remember at the heart it's the music you hear,
Don't worry about the lyrics theres nothing to fear,
So get down to the mellody get down to the ground,
Let me see you dancin' see you dancin' right now!

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We are Unimatrix Corporation~
:iconnegasus:
Pretty slick right there Ivy.


Do you even remember me anymore? =p
:iconchocobosayskweh:
I agree with *kampasi, Ivy. I have no idea who this Phil is, because I have not kept up with your journals, nor attempted to scrutinize the backlogs that have collected in my message box.

I do know this, though. You are a brilliant artist. Your works, when I read them, attack and envelop my senses. Rhyming schems are used by some, but they are far from necessary. You are living proof.

Now that I am back (mostly) here on DeviantART, it is about time that I comment on some works. A lot of them. Get ready to be critiqued. :)

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Smiling to me, oh boy what can I do?
I just can say, "Salaam!"
:iconevilabnormalvamp:
Neggy, you really need to come back into my life more often. :heart:

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stop hiding.
i can handle you.
:iconevilabnormalvamp:
:boogie::dance::boogie:

That was pretty smooth, Mr. Cool.

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stop hiding.
i can handle you.
:iconevilabnormalvamp:
I miss you.

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stop hiding.
i can handle you.
:iconevilabnormalvamp:
I think rhyming is generic and overused and it makes me think the author has nothing to say.
Obviously I'm not asking anyone to agree with me.
Thank you.

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stop hiding.
i can handle you.

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