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dear gaping
hole in my heart
in my senses in my
lungs in my logic in my
sky push
a little wider


burn me open
with one more
cigarette


burn that girl
through to bone
with what is left
of my will
and testament.
:iconevilabnormalvamp:

Author's Comments

As far as I'm concerned, thanks to this gaping hole in my life, July has already happened to the extent that it's going to. So here's July.

I wanted to put more pain in it.
I wanted to take out ventilate so I did.

too numb.

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:iconevilabnormalvamp:
Half a heart.
the irony.

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stop hiding.
i can handle you.
:iconmichellelynn725:
Makes my chest hurt like a morning after burn of too much intake. I like this piece for that reason. The simplicity works with this feeling. Not-yet-awake body essessments of sorts.

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We'll drink and drink and drink and drink and drink and drink and fight!! Oy!

-'Flogging Molly'
:iconevilabnormalvamp:
Not that I'm glad for your sympathy pains hahaha but somehow I'm glad this hurts. It drips hurt.

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stop hiding.
i can handle you.
:iconmichellelynn725:
Right. Love that feeling when someone catches me off guard
in wording it just right.

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We'll drink and drink and drink and drink and drink and drink and fight!! Oy!

-'Flogging Molly'
:iconjenniferstarling:
Putting your numbness in it is putting your suffering in it- especially as a writer, seeing as writers have a tendency to sublimate palpable pain as a way of working through it.

I agree with MichelleLynn that the poem conveys a sort of physicality, like shallow breathing. I think it's the small stanzas and the visual structure as well as the words themselves. Well-executed.

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Current novel-in-progress.
:iconevilabnormalvamp:
I'm glad the overall feeling and emotion of the time was communicated successfully. you're the one who really suggested form with me, a while ago; before then I'd always been educated about it but never used it myself. So thank you for that.

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stop hiding.
i can handle you.

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